BookRix

it's good, I enjoyed it :)

A good read, I liked it.

FYI, there's a rather offputting error in the Introduction. You say you were born on a certain date BC, and then said two year later, well two years later would be a smaller number BC. ;-) Can't comment on the book since I have not read it yet.

Hey I love your book so much. Please keep me updated will you. I love how you writing it and make it so interesting. I really hope that I can write it like that someday and sorry it has been long time seen I promised you to look at your book. Now I already look and read it. I am so into it. <3

Miss.Z Xoxo

i just started and it seems really good!! XD but it is somewhat hard to read, i hope you get the chance to edit it.

well not really she from a different world for one. and on Planet Luau she's 20 years old

Right now I only have one suggestion. The story would be much easier to read if you would get rid of at least two thirds of your "ands" They slow the story down. Oh, and did you realize your main character is 62 years old

Otherwise you have a good idea, and with a little editing It will make a great story.

I love how the main character has my birth date, except I was born decades later :D
As for your story, the content is very good. I like that you have an introduction so that we would immediately be thrown into the drama of the story.
You might want to edit your story a bit though so that it would be easier to read. I really enjoy the details that you give, but you tend to be redundant at times. Take when you describe Nemesis as a Navy Seal for example. You could have condensed that fact that she is a Seal in a shorter sentence. If she is wearing the uniform and you point out what type, then it is obvious to the reader what her line of work is.
Apart from sentence structure and redundancies, the content is very very good. You have a great imagination and I look forward to any other book that you might post up in the future

If Anyone has a guestion about my book please let me know

aaagggggggggggg.........i knew it, it was going to be an awesome book. well done i love it keep writing and keep me updated^_^