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Well written so far. The story is flowing nicely with no drag and just enough foreshadowing to keep you curious. only suggestion is grammatical. when writing conversations each time the speaker changes start a new paragraph. Even if it would just be a one word paragraph.
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Thanks! I'm just trying to get it out for now, but I'll try to work on it as I'm writing more :)
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