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This book is being featured in the new YoungWriters contest.

http://www.bookrix.com/_groupforum-en-win-a-writers-and-artists-yearbook-2003.html

Please vote in the thread if you would like it to win. (Simply press the green plus sign.)
Chris

Clean and well edited, good story line. Maybe a little more "showing vs. telling"...

ss-The Camera

I appreciate that you have saved my story.

I'm happy you enjoyed my story.Most of what I wrote was true, although my Nanny didn't read the tea leaves. When I arrived in California my Aunt did get me interested in looking for The Lady in Black. I knew I would see her, but for all I knew she she might be dead. That summer was great and will always stay with me. To this day my brother still is a tease. :)

This book had a great sense of mystery as well as a good dose of teenageism (if that's a word). You kept to the teenage point of view well. You made it seem as if you had really experienced everything, and I could feel as if I were sneaking up on the lady in black, trembling, excited, not knowing what I may find. Well done!

Welcome back. Thanks for taking the time to comment and vote. Serena

nice read. It kept my attention all the way through, and it was a nice idea as well.

Thank you for all of your editing help,and thank you especially when I know what I want to say, and I can't think of the right words.

Thanks for reading my story.When I was young I could escape for a short time watching the old movies, and I still watch them but am saddened to think most of those actors have died.

I had such a strained relationship with my Nana but I was young and thought everything could be fixed.It never was. My other Grandmother was wonderful. I'm not saying she spoiled us but I knew that she loved us, all nine of us.

Of course I've read this more than once:) I'm happy to say I continue to see a vast leap upward in narrative skill, plot development, character building, and especially tying the opening into the story as a whole. Proud of you.
I'm also happy to see that the time-glitch concerning this story's entry into the contest was at long last fixed:) You understood, and adhered remarkably well to the contest theme. Very best of luck!