BookRix

Aside from a few boo-boos (I think you might have meant "Fate" instead of "Faith" on the bottom of page 7, but I could be wrong), the sarcasm was hilarious in places, your descriptions wonderful, and the story well-contrived. In other words, I felt it deserved a vote, so here it is! Great job!

This is a nice plot for a story, but you might mean “snowpocalypse” (with “y” before “p”) for your title. Oh well, snow can sometimes be fun, although it can also be a headache. Just one suggestion in page 5 – delete “an” (e.g.: “I would have to walk for half hour . . .”). I hope this helps. You have an interesting way to describe the experience of your character. Nice work!

Good writing too. Watch your metaphors/cliches 'I couldn't believe my eyes' 'Avoid them like the plague'!
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Wendy