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There is a lot of "telling" in the beginning but finally it takes off.
Thank you for submitting this story.

The story flows well while building the tension. Congratulations.
Yamuna

Very vivid descriptive style brings alive the location, sounds, smells of the place and the question of what next. This story has my vote.

Thank you for participating in our short story writing contest "Rain Stories".

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