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Nicely down. Very well written.

You did an excellent job at describing the gloomy, dark, eerie play the girl was in. It left me with questions, wondering how the girl had gotten there and what was going to happen to her. Who was the man? Was he going to beat her? Had she been kidnapped?
I believe this would be an excellent hook to a book if you so choose to play off this short story.
Bravo! Great job :)

---RbG

love all your books please keep writing this book you are a very well writer :)

This was excellent.
I think you described this very well and I think it has the potential of putting someone on the edge of their seat with suspense. :D

That's terrifyiing. Good job! :)

Review - Again, you are able to describe a scene with a creative presence. You are very good at making the scene very believable by weaving in the senses. This one was a nail biter, and again I could feel the fear and pain of the captive girl. Impressive. Keep writing! Robynn