Love and War

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Love and War
2 rival gangs, 2 ex lovers and 1 murder.
When one of the brawlers was murdered on the Chixx territory, the 2 rival gangs are on the verge of war.
Can old love stop more bloodshed or will it be the spark setting off the war?!

This is going to be a short story and will continue to get updated until its finished :D

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sam, steve, gangs, murder, attack, betrayal, love, war
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theartistatwork.official

Hi there! I've seen your work and I'd like to commend you for having such talent and imagination. Your works of art shouldn't be limited and should be recognized by many. Maybe you'd like to check out N0velStar and consider joining their competition this April.

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Gelöschter User

as usual I love your work, !!!

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Gelöschter User

In your second sentence of the first paragraph there seems to be an adjective missing from the sentence...

when the character hears the other voices I would describe them a little to make the reader aware they are seperate entities..adding descriptives like: "said, in a deep male voice."

Keep at it..We all are here to help each other...remember F7 on your keyboard...spellcheck lol

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felixthecat

Of course it's worth continuing, Sami. You have the right ingredients; an into, that with a bit of rework is very good, plus the inciting incident and tension-building. Yes, keep working on it:)

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