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This is a great concept. It has the feel of the Twilight Zone.
One error: March is described as having brown eyes in one paragraph, and blue in the next.
A suggestion: Don't have Stephanie say outright that "this is a parallel universe." Let the details make that reveal; they are enough.
Question: Is this 1000 words or less? It seems like longer. Make sure it's pared for the flash fiction contest. You could probably condense the... mehr anzeigen
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I could really see this book being a movie!
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A spellbinding story! I couldn't stop until I had finished. What an imagination you have! Great work!
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