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You have a good story here, with a little cleaning up it would be even better!
You don't spend enough time on the characters surroundings and how they feel (Of course, this is all a matter of opinion) I do realize that this was for the flash fiction contest and so you did what you could with the words you were allotted, but DEFINITELY expand this! :D
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