BookRix

thank you for your very kind words. i hope and wish i get into the bracket. but regardless, please feel free to share my story with others. once again, thank you.

It's refreshing to find gems like this! It reads effortlessly and elegantly. I've been reading all the contest entries and this one, like Felix said, deserves to be in the top five. You have my vote!

I agree with Pat. This was very well written and you definitely have a talent for expressing yourself well. My only gripe with the story is that it was more of a "tell" rather than a "show" - and in flash fiction, my personal preference is a surprise ending.

However, you do deserve more votes for this very good piece of writing...and you have mine.

There are certain, sure indicators that a writer knows her stuff. An effortless facility with language and narration...most times I can predict the quality of a work by simply reading the first paragraph. I'll be damned if the entire story wasn't filled with exceptional imagery and language, from start to exquisite finish.
My hat is off to you, RN. This story should be in the top five, and I mean that sincerely. I so hope because of the position in entries that you are not overlooked by serious readers. You have a definite Literary bent.