Orlando, My Hero

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Orlando, My Hero
Jen isn't sleeping. She blames it on the hot, summer nights, but what's the real cause of her sleeplessness. Find out where Jen's search for her hero takes her.

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Gelöschter User

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etelizabeth

Hi, Bek, I've read this piece and left comments, but for some strange reason, they are not showing up. The storyline is an interesting premise; I wonder if you are involved in the study of mind disorders. You step into that realm quite easily. I, too, love the intrigue of the recesses of the mind! A grand pursuit of unlimited possibilities. I have read this tale the second time and there are areas that need punctuation for... mehr anzeigen

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rebekahjennings

Thanks for that Elizabeth. I have had my comments disappear on more than one occasion and you know me. I write lengthy feedback. So I've learned to copy my work before I press submit. It has saved me many times. Then if it disappears I paste it back in and it works the second... mehr anzeigen

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cavlaster

I like your creative tale. I have a sister who suffers from that condition. Thanks for sharing.

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gooduklady

Your story kept me glued to every page. You did an excellent job of keeping the reader engaged and painted a vivid portrayal of someone with a mental disease. I agree with Wendy, though. Change the front cover picture to something more catchy. Good luck and congrats on another fine piece. Valerie

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rebekahjennings

Thanks loads, Valerie. Yes, I'm questioning my taste, lol... in cover art. I thought this would work as it shows the police lights (bit of foreshadowing) and also the cutsie font that also indicate 'love'. All feedback welcome though. I've learned a lot from all of you.

Bek :)

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Kalai

You have taken a simple theme but has successfully elaborated it into a fast reading piece. Jen is a reflection of girls of this modern age, where they chase unknown pastures and forget to live in the present.

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lovingempath

You did a great job of capturing (and portraying) many symptoms of 'several' abnormal-psychology disorders Bek. "Bipolar disease" being the most obvious here. (I'm also working on a short story, with a severe 'manic/depressive' cycle. I'm waiting fr my next 'manic' episode to finish it..:).

This caught me by the throat from the very first page, and kept me going till the end. To me...this is your finest piece to date - and... mehr anzeigen

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rebekahjennings

Hi Robin,

Your comments are valued, especially so given you too are both talented and clued in on the craft. I am not always very confident in my writing so you have truly uplifted me today. Thanks for taking time to read my work and give me feedback.

Bek

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ashokaatreya

How said and worrying outcome of your hero,Orlando who could disturb Jen to the extent that she became a mental case.Sending her message from the cover of a magazine...and all other things are natural but to me that all is a sort of case study and does not fit into total creative experience for that you require some additional ideas and thoughts
Still the piece is interesting and the whole too
Ashok Aatreya

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paulashene

you either have a connection to someone or are studying psychology because you so easily transported us back into your other story 'Choking On Air' - very believable premise again as we revisit the world of the disconnected...great job in telling it ...Paula

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