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The font makes it a little hard to read, but other wise, good job! I can't wait to read more. =)
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Few errors, but a good, descriptive, and beautiful read. i like it. butthere are a few times you used an adverb as an adjective, like when you wrote, "most eerily feeling," it should be "most eerie feeling." and beware of run-on sentences! they are your worst enemy in novel writing! add commas and semicolos to fix them. Other than that, it is beautiful and entrancing! Continue to write!
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