BookRix

thank you, all of you. This book was for the kiss me contest nothing advanced but my favorite book that ive written is kissing in the snow. i read some of the oother entries and felt like mine wasnt good enough

I liked what you have written but you might want to change the text color. That's really the only thing you have to worry about changing. So you have good writing skills and I hope you keep writing.

A suggestion - red letters on a red background are really hard to read. It took me a long time to get through each page because I had to keep adjusting my screen. If you want to keep with the "love" theme in terms of colors, try using a light pink for the letters.

It's a sweet tale, but if you're really only twelve and writing stories as sexually advanced as this, you might want to consider that most girls your age don't think this way. Your recommended reading age was appropriate, though, but hey, I'm old-fashioned, lol.

Overall, it's well-told, as is "Suicide," and as I said before, I really hope you keep writing. I'm very impressed with your skill!

thank you

I like it.