BookRix

I liked the story and agree with a lot of the other comments in terms of needing to continue refining and developing it some more. Got some really good potential here.

nope its not bout me... just a made up original story

It's been said that first works are often autobiographical! Yikes! I hope not in this case!!!!

Missyman is pretty much correct. It isn't precisely "reporting", but you were close. Check out your tense agreement as well as those little grammatical and punctuation errors, too. Really, easy fixes.
The great thing about The Robbery is the way in which you showed three young girls doing something very wrong without an apparent, good motive. It hit me as quite real and absolutely plausible. So, it is a slice-of-life portrait, and that is SO interesting to read.
Kudos:)

Wow, what a way to leave us hanging! Can't wait to hear the rest. Please contact me when ya add to it please! :)

As far as the writing is concerned...it is good. Some small errors here and there.
The story is also good. Needs more description. The three friends got what they deserved...will be interesting to read what will happen to them next.
Laz