it was very confusing with no seperation of paragraphs and it should not be x rated
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THIS STORY HAD A LOT OF POTENTIAL, BUT YOUR SPELLING, PUNCTUATION & NO SEPARATION OF PARAGRAPHS, IT MADE IT VERY HARD TO READ. I THINK YOU SHOULD GET SOME HELP ON THIS STORY AND RESUBMIT IT.
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THIS STORY MAY HAVE HAD some potential but the grammar is poor,and spelling is a mess! Who doesn't use spell check? And then you refer to college, well if they're allowing this in any college no wonder the US is at the bottom for education
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THIS STORY MAY HAVE HAD some potential but the grammar is poor,and spelling is a mess! Who doesn't use spell check? And then you refer to college, well if they're allowing this in any college no wonder the US is at the bottom for education
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made no sense. it was really great but you need some punctuation i kind of got mixed up. u should write more
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