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good writing, need a good plot and story to go with it.

Great story, with thorough descriptions to set the scene. It sounds like a place I wouldn't mind spending some time on a vacation. I liked the image of two beings floating together in space. Was his spirit with her and his body on earth? I wasn't sure at the end. You should definitely be writing novels. Your talent extends to many genres.

Nicely done ... Flash science fiction, I would have loved to read more about this, you had me caring about the characters in just a few words. Well done....sorry I wasn't around to vote on this.

I enjoyed your descriptions in this story. They were rich and vivid, depicting a dream sequence that drew me in. I thought the ending was mysterious and it offered a glimpse of astral projection or something similar. You are very talented, Pat. Thank you for sharing.

Three cheers for flash sci-fi! Well done, sir. A wonderful atmosphere of melancholy and intrigue permeated the story throughout.

Coming to the end of the story, reminded me of the movie, Flatliners, I think that's what it was called, with Julia Roberts, Kevin Bacon and Keifer Sutherland. It was a good movie too. :)

oh this so gets my vote

Hi Patrick,

I came back to vote. I wish you the best in the contest.

Good writing there Patrick. Great descriptive work. Good prose. Well done.

Couldn't find anything wrong with this. Like most of the flash-fiction entries, it sounds like the beginning of something wonderful. Your originality was superb; crafting a landscape that was outlandish and incredible. The premise was good too. Excellent polish and style.