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sir, please opened the full page

yeah i noticed that right after i published it. Thank you for pointing it out

I'm a very picky person, hopefully some may find it useful. i hope this does.
on the very first page, you talk about the door opening easily, you said that twice, pick a line, delete the other.
We already know it opened easily, But if it opened easily why did he push? maybe define, or add something about the man's reaction/body action to it opening easily while he push.
Hope it helps. Good luck, sounds interesting.