There is a Reason for Everything

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There is a Reason for Everything
Jack's day got worse and worse. He had been looking forward to a first class flight to Canada but it wasn't meant to be.

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pamela60

Hi Augustus, Thanks for your comments. Have taken on board your advice and rewritten. Pam

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augustus

Hi Pam,
Wow.
Lots of action in a tight little package. You asked for a read and here's what I noticed.

Your story and plot are sound. There is a good set-up, middle and end. I would say that your middle is actually the best part of your story. Here's why.

Your beginning tells us something about Jack but not much about his values in life. Some people (in the news lately) will go so far as to slap a child if the child is bothering... mehr anzeigen

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