Extraordinary ending. It was succinct, yet it spoke volumes.
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Wonderful story. Well written and interesting. I never thought of the story being from the robot's perspective.
Good luck in the contest
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Wow. This is great. Thanks for sharing. I loved it. I can't believe this is your first attempt at sci-fi.
A quick formatting issue you'll want to fix while you have time: on page four at "'You're leaving again...'" you need to shift the blocking. You have the robot's action attached to the man's dialogue, and you need to move it down to precede the robot's dialogue. I think you have a really good chance with this contest, and... mehr anzeigen
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Oh wow! I know better than to do that; I have no idea what I did it here. Thank you for pointing it out and for the positive feedback. It's always nice to hear when my writing efforts don't fall flat :).
I love the descriptive viewpoint from the robot. Though the coldness of the unit is evident, the "primary directive" makes it seem caring and devoted to Carlisle. Fine first effort at the Science Fiction genre P.K.!
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Thank you!
I loved it, wonderful! I love her voice, the confusion, the decisions. I love it all, well done!
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Thank you! I'm glad you think so, since it's my first try at Sci-Fi :)