A somewhat obscure story of unimaginable characters. Except for one, and then...Did Corny have 'large, veined hands, or large-veined hands. Just asking.
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This was very creative! I could imagine the breakfast characters jumping off their paper labels. It was so real. Snap, Crackle, and Pop were my favorite ;) Well done.
However, the story was a tad hard to follow I think it was because of the punctuation, which was lacking and rarely seen (that I remember). I think it would do you well to go back and fix all that up so that not only the words can be comprehended, but the actual... mehr anzeigen
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good luck!
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You write well, and Snap, Crackle and Pop and the cast of characters kept me hopping throughout!
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An inspired piece of work. Your story is captivating and your cleverly named characters grabed my attention. Two spoons up from me, may I have another please.
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I'm glad you liked it! I've submitted it to the Flash Fiction contest. I don't expect to win anything since it's not as deep and dark as the other submissions but I figured maybe the change will be refreshing and I'll have a snowball's chance in hell LOL
Anyway, I'm loving the excerpt from your latest book and can't wait to read more:)
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I don't think you missed a single grain in this delightful little romp over the breakfast table:)
Nice; imaginative to the max!
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