BookRix

Hai~~~~

Wut font is the title?

Adiós

-Lauren

Thanks for taking the time to read it. I really appreciate your advice and I'll make inprovements

i really like it as it gets better by the page. but i think you spelled alot of the words wrong, and thinks happen alittle fast at the beginning shouldnt there be more emotion and introductins and at first it sounds like a narrator is talking but then she is talking from a one person view. you need to slow things down a bit so your book isnt ONLY 1 and 1/2 pages long. sorry, i mean this as a writer and it IS a very good book, but... she didnt even react at first it was wierd sorry.