Thank you so much Robert K.Galvez for reviewing my book.
11-23-2018, 3:22pm
...Greetings Mii Ryouma;...
...I hope this message finds you well...Fear not, this is not a meaningless spam message: I am merely messaging you to inform you that I read your novella 'The Last Azvisalokya' and wish you every encouragement...
...It was, personally, like Silverberg and LaVey meeting Le Guin for me...The potential of the narrative is... mehr anzeigen
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Under heavy editing.
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Under heavy editing,,
Next chapters are coming soon Incha'Allah
I mean the sahed and Nina can be togather and they should. Be after all they went through now I don't like. Lucida but the ending in which he said my daughter is not a mere trophy man!!!! Intense what a rollaecoster of emotions it was man!!!! I wanna kill demons now!!! It's a beautiful book and I'm waiting for more
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Reading the first few pages, I can barely review but from what I see you don't really need much critiquing. At least, not from me. But how you write is by far categorized in a league above the people I've read from. You paint a picture with your words and you don't go around info-dumping your readers. I would love to know more about the Namaka and our protagonist as well as what trials she'll be facing from here on out.... mehr anzeigen
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That's way more than anything I've expected ^_^
Honestly I'm not confident about the way I write, I feel that something is missing, but I can't put my hands on it.
So, finding this post about my book was the ultimate happiness I've ever dreamed of...
Thank you sir for all the time... mehr anzeigen
its an incredible interpretation of universes and its creator with clever structure impressive and quite frankly im impressed and wish i wrote at your standard.
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I didn't see the notification of this post! And I'm so sorry for the late reply.
Thank you so much for this comment! It took my breath away!! And literally left me speechless!
And I'm so grateful for all the precious time you put in reading my first English book.
Thank u again :)
No, don't split the book. Your book is well done. Such a book with that keeps you on your toes for the longest time is best kept long since the reader is constantly yearning for more. At least in my experience.
By the way i like the new cover. :)
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Heyyy :D
Thank u so much for this sweet post, I was really in need of someone's opinion..
and glad u like the new cover :]
Do I have to split the book into series, each one covering one or two chapters? Since the chapters are long.
I'm not sure if it will help the reader to read thoroughly.
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Awwwwwwww
I miss that smile on your face my big boy ^_^
Hope you're doing great in your life dearest friend .
but im missng u all
^_^
please , be safe and stay happy my friend
I've read a book that kept me on my toes but it was a comedy book. Yours however was intense, you were able to keep the pressure on and slowly building.
Let me just cut to the chase and say;
I CAN'T WAIT FOR BOOK TWO!!!
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I'm so flattered by this post, it kept me smiling for more than few minutes.
And thank u so much for giving my book all that time to read it. I'm so glad u enjoyed its long chapters even if it's not finished yet :)
Book two is not coming soon, at least until I put a full stop to... mehr anzeigen
Yes i agree, while i am eager to see what happens next; it is important to polish the book to a shine :) so you know it is finished and can focus on the next.
yep :)
I totally agree.
Good luck with polishing your book too :)
Thnx :)
Ok on pg 15 last paragraph instead of "Black tears started flooding... " try started flowing or begun welling up. Also pg 17 the last paragraph 1st sentence is abit confusing, plz revise it. In fact these small errors can build up and cause lazy readers to toss the book. However you did say english is your third language. In that case you've done really well. I will keep pointing out a few things here and there. The story is... mehr anzeigen
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Just finished chapter 2; and oh my!!! You really know how to spin a tale.
In fact chapter two qualifies to be a thriller. I love the way you kept the momentum going all the way through the chapter, it was beautifull.
Also filling in the blanks from the preface was well done. I... mehr anzeigen
OH MY GOD!!
I've never expected that kind of comments on my book, since it's my first book ever. And especially when English is my third language.
:D
:D
Thank u so much for lifting my spirit that much, your comments made my day ..
:-) Don't sweat the third language part. From what i can see this bk is great. You can always polish the language; but the story is a whole other issue. Just think. If it's this good now imagine what it will be like after smoothing it out. :-)
love it though the pics kind a creep me out but over - all its great so keep writing
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Do you think that it should be rated +16 instead of +14 because of the pics?