BookRix

That's a bit creepy. It's disturbing, it's sick, it's insane... I love it XD

The only thing I would say would be to watch your run-ons. Remember that each sentence is one idea and one idea only, as are paragraphs, which you seem to be doing rather well with.

Nice story!

Don't be let down that it's not getting out there yet it's just people don't like to read story that are not that long yet and yes it is good just few glitches here and there but it's good that you stared to explain the situation cause you can't really build on a story like this one without explaining what is what especially your story cause of the nature of the zombies

this is good so far
i suggest that you read BITE by T.D its on bookrix and would make a good reference and just a good read

Write what is easy and passionate for you to write about and I guarantee that others will like it too. When you write you want to type something that you like and not what you think will get the book popular. Let the writing come naturally to you..from there on people will just see the talent and like it from there. Your welcome.

~Jillian~

Thanks. I know how I want it to go its just I like to make sure other people like it so I know it is really good and not terrible so I can try to finish writing it. Thanks again.

One or two spelling errors in Chapter 1. I think you are off to a good start but you have to know as an author that zombie books can go either way. It can be errie and scary like a horror or it can become humor. So just make sure you know what kind of book you want to write and then make it so that if you were really in that situation and you want others to feel your terror. Otherwise good start and as you keep writing your book the title should just come easily to you.

`Jillian~