I actually relly like it so far I hope you add more. As soon as I started reading it it got interesting. Continue it and it will be awesome..okaaayy? Im gonna add this to my favorites now..
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It's s very fast pace story.
But I like it. You should keep it going!
Only one negative thing hit me : the dialogue is a bit hard to read since the lines are all mushed together. And there are just a few capitalization errors.
I'm just hoping the story does not go over-board romantic.
But please keep writing :)
---RbG
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Good start, although it does sound a bit twilight. You could try to change it a bit here and there to give it your own style. Grammar is good and would like to see where you're going with it.
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