That Summer

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That Summer
Raven was just expecting it to be a normal, laid back summer with her dad. But then as quickly as it seems, Raven meets a famous superstar and falls inlove with him.

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I actually relly like it so far I hope you add more. As soon as I started reading it it got interesting. Continue it and it will be awesome..okaaayy? Im gonna add this to my favorites now..

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robbedbygreed

It's s very fast pace story.
But I like it. You should keep it going!
Only one negative thing hit me : the dialogue is a bit hard to read since the lines are all mushed together. And there are just a few capitalization errors.
I'm just hoping the story does not go over-board romantic.
But please keep writing :)

---RbG
By the way, if you'd like, could you read my book A World Invisible To The Wise and give me some feedback? I'd... mehr anzeigen

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Gelöschter User

Good start, although it does sound a bit twilight. You could try to change it a bit here and there to give it your own style. Grammar is good and would like to see where you're going with it.

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