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I actually liked this one! Only word of note: Capital letters and no punctuation makes it really hard to read. Good Job!

The ending was so funny!!!!!!!!!!

did you not read the book? (I dont mean to be rude at ALL).
She said she didnt want to think his name let alone speak it
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there are some missed spelled words but when your hurrying and writing in a diary some things get missed spelled - doing fine loved it

it good

It wasn't bad.... but like my English teacher once told me....there's always room for improvement. There was one big thing I noticed you were missing, punctuations. You don't have any punctuation marks. I can't tell where a sentence starts and where it ends. Another big thing is everything is in BOLD, which didn't help me figure out when the sentence stops and the another begins. Using "and" twice in a sentence is a no no,and your word choices could be improved a little. Other then that... the concept of your book in diary form of "Twilight" is good. You should write more and have someone edit them for you. :)

Guys she's like 13 years old, she did pretty good for her age.

boooring

boooring