The Wizarding War

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The Wizarding War

Fenzar is a wizard, more accurately a Wigand, who has been recruited to attend a wizards school designed to not only teach the students, but also test them. With the teachers harsh reprimands, the constant threat to one's life and the medieval-style initiation rituals, life at Magicae School of Wizardy is truly one that only the strongest can survive. But as Fenzar progresses with his education, many surprising secrets come to light. Also, a secret war rages on between the Wizards and the Wigands, a war that has successfully escaped human eyes for hundreds of years. Now, it is up to Fenzar to put an end to the war….or die trying.

 

UNDERGOING RENOVATION! PLEASE DO NOT READ!


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theartistatwork.official

You can publish this in a mobile app so a lot of readers can see your lovely work. Check on N0velStar and see how other writers earn by pursuing their passion in writing

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Lorian Lilsiel

This kinda' reminds me of another book I read called The Iron Trial: kid finds out he's a wizard but really doesn't want to be, goes to the special wizarding school, finds out he has a special talent (now going off description) that is probably very rare, ends up being involved in some form of wizard war. It's a good story outline that you can do a lot with and that I find very interesting. Looking forward to the rest!

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melmmhs94

awesome! Im glad you lked it! How did you like the setup of the school? Im still playing around with the curriculum, though. Any ideas?

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Gelöschter User

I agree about keeping as far as you can from Harry Potter but also there are other similar ideas by the likes of Raymond E Feist. It might even be an idea to read "Magician" by him to get an alternative view of a training academy for wizards - it's far less "cute" - and develop your academy by putting your own spin on the concept. Other than that, it looks to be a good start. Nicely done!

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melmmhs94

Thanks! I'll put that on my reading list. Do you have any plot ideas or things you'd like to add/change?

Gelöschter User

I can't comment on changes as your writing style and concept is uniquely yours. As far as plot ideas go, how about looking into how Fenzar copes with using magic "in anger" as it were and finding out that there is always a cost - either physical or psychological? There's also... mehr anzeigen

melmmhs94

I see what your saying. Okay! I'll do that! Thanks so much!

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RevkenR

With you the excitement never stops.

melmmhs94

and thank you so much, Revkenr. I can always count on your comments. :)

RevkenR

Don't want to get too close to the Harry Potter thing, but each book's plot revolved around a different attempt for the bed guys to take over the school, or the Wizarding world in general.

How will they attempt to influence what is being taught in the school, Perhaps they will... mehr anzeigen

melmmhs94

Thats why I'm doing this. I also noticed I have copied the three characters from HP, which was unintentional. So, this whole refurbishing is meant to get me away from that predicament.
Hmm...That might be able to work later in the series. I'll write it down in my notebook and keep it in mind. Thanks!

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RevkenR

With you the excitement never stops. This is another breathtaking chapter in another thrilling story.

Thank you and keep up the good work.

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Gelöschter User

LOVE IT SO FAR!!! Can't wait for more. Please write more soon.

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RevkenR

Hopefully the first day of school is the worst.

And since the school is exempt from Child abuse laws, that makes it worse.

Well written!

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RevkenR

You introduce your characters very well. And I can almost see the school in my mind.

I will look forward to seeing what happens next.

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gooduklady

Melissa: Please follow this link http://www.bookrix.com/_group-en-learning-to-write-better-101 and provide me with a score for this review.

Thanks.

The Wizarding Wars

1) Did this first page make you want to read more of the book?

I was drawn in by the family dynamics, but not because of the wizard aspect, because you had not gotten there yet. So yes, based on what I read, I would be interested in seeing more.

2) State what you... mehr anzeigen

melmmhs94

what was he thinking? could you clarify that? do you mean 'what was hi thinking' as in James thinking something or james thinking 'what was i thinking?'?

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RevkenR

The First one. What was James thinking? He had never seen this man before. The dogs didn't like him, and it meant moving away from his mom who was being stocked by her ex. There are so many questions, but most of them can be answered in the rest of the book. Just some kind of... mehr anzeigen

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