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Hmmm. . . are you going to finish this or leave me hanging? I would love to know what happens. Sometimes it's slow, other times you jump from one Pov to another but i love the story plot and would love to see it finished.

Thanks for explaining. i will have another read tomorrow and let you know my thoughts. I love the presentation BTW
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I'm all confused. i went back in to try and see what you meant and it's all changed. I think. What was i reading earlier? Or have i finally lost my marbles?

Thank you writingmum! I definitely get what you are saying. I will fix that, I wanted to explain the alternate universe at the earliest moment. But I had been debating on whether to leave it for chapter 4 or 5, but I was thinking people would get to annoyed by it. But now, I think maybe I should grab just parts of the prologue and explain it through-out the chapters.

Thank you so much for your feedback, it's gold to me :)

This is very nicely written. You have a style about you and I hope you'll continue to develop that.

One observation...

I felt the beginning was too long and didn't really grab me. I would suggest you put this section under a prologue title and then begin chapter 1 with...'I came to Italy at ten years old...'

I loved the hook at the end. Who doesn't love the premise of a prophecy?

Good luck with your book
Wendy xxx

Thank you for the star and the lovely comment. I will be posting more chapters soon to see if it's still interesting. Thank you for reading!

This story was very well written and pretty interesting from the beginning to the end.

This story was very well written and pretty interesting from the beginning to the end.

Sorry about the repeat, I've been having some technical problems all day, don't know if it's the site or my crappy computer or internet service.