BookRix

Not bad!

what just happened

I would love to hear the rest of the story!

i want to know the result!!! please continueeee

Okay, I am dying over here. I need to know the rest of the story!

AFter reading this book,
i surely don't forgot bestfriend.
Plz,

I think the only person telling the truth is Lucas, when he said you bitches are all crazy......Loved your imagination.....

It's hard to tell; all three are so creepy that either one of them could be telling the truth. And yes, I would love to read more about these weird friends. Good job.

I reread my book and just realized you were right. His testimony really was funny ahaha! XD
Thank you for giving your honest opinion about my book. :)
P.S. Whose testimony did you believe? ;)

Bubbles has it right; you need to add more body. There was a lack of clarity that would have been helped by extra description. The premise was good because it broke new ground, but I felt that you needed to think it out better to execute it successfully. The more I think about the story the more my interpretation changes. It's good to leave it open ended, but this may have been downright off the rails. You're a tenacious writer, and that sets you far apart from all of the other writer's on this site, but you need to work on your mechanics to evolve from a promising upstart into a truly great writer.

P.S. Lucas' testimony was actually kinda funny. Morbid, I know.