BookRix

Please update this book I want to know what happens please...

I like the graveyard imagery in this creepy story.

This one was very polished. I didn't see a single mistake. It makes me happy to see you improve so much.

When I read your blurbs your premises are more and more outlandish with each one I see. The turnaround is when I give them a shot. You have excellent flow that sells these stories from the start. You need to finish one!

wow! thank you very much everyone! :)

Excellent story. I'm looking forward to the next one.

So this story is very... dark. It wasn't bad until the last couple sentences. It made me shudder.

But your writing is good, though it could be better. And some of your sentences were confusing, so I think you could go back and simplify them.

That said, I think you've mastered the basics of the English language. So now you should begin to add on to your knowledge and slowly embellish your writing. And not simply with words, but with style. Add some spunk to it so the story isn't list-like.

Overall, good job :) You have talent, so keep working at it! And remember, writing, like any sport, takes hard work and time to master.

Goo job!
Keep writing!

---RbG

Wow off to a great start.I love how u didn't rush throw any important parts and was carefully written Hope u continue!<3