BookRix

Well written however try not to assosiate medieval things with modern things also check out my book.The Crimson sea

It's awesome!! I wish I had green eyes now.

write more plezz its really gud plez write more

write more plezz its really gud plez write more

write more plezz its really gud plez write more

i love it!!!! please finish!!

please finish!!!!

As much as possible change the past perfect tense (had, have) to just the past tense. It's a little thing but it helps the reader flow through the story better.

I like the book. I think you should continue writting and make it a novel.