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Thankyou kindly! :-)

Hello M4rc,
I intercepted your signal, and I was truly impressed by your coding skills. My antennas can definitely decode the lyrical potential of your programs! My favorites were "Another Soul" and "By Your Command". I don't know if your memory banks already familiar with The Cure, but you might enjoy some of their lyrics (even if you don't like their music); robottina recommends lyrics for the songs "Primary" and "Disintegration".
Please feel free to intercept my transmission of cryogenic poetry if you wish, or send me a private signal if you would like to discuss music.
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robottina

A vote for the explosion!

I've been bombarded by raw emotion! Gorgeous! Petra :))

I know exactly what you mean when you said you sometimes set off for a non-rhyming poem and end up having it rhyming. Perhaps its meant to be then! Thank you for your feed back, Marc

Hey there... your work reminds me a lot of mine when I was your age. Some of the poems from my work for the contest were written at that time. You have a natural sense of rhythm in your writing that flows - I hear what you're saying about rhyming. I sometimes set out to write a non-rhyming poem and end up writing a completely rhymed piece. Oh well!

Marc, I will answer the question in your last piece. Who would miss your soul? We would miss your soul and your talent. For one so young, you are at a place that I believe many, much older, would envy. I was very impressed. Of course, do take into consideration the helpful advice of those poets who take the time to give constructive helps, but I didn't see much that you needed help with. You should be very proud of this work, keep it up, we would love to read more. Good luck and God Bless.

Hi Joe,
Thank you very much for your input. The funny thing is, I don't feel the need to rhyme, I just love it too much. But you are right- the errors made do hurt my poetry and my message as a whole, so I am going to work on them alot more. Thanks again.-Marc.

Hi Marc. I'll give you a high mark for the poems:'Tundra and 'Engraving my center in Hell and for the line :"and you out thrill me" Nicely done. My comment: You do not have to feel obsessed to rhyme each line. Unless it contributes to your story; stretching the words to rhyme will sometimes change your need to get the reader to believe in what you say. I think you have a fantastic talent with words but make sure that those that read can also read between those lines. I have made those errors of rhyming and have battled to strive to correct them./Joe

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poetry writing contest "Winter & Poems".

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