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Got bored so i thought id read another of your books, but dont start weeping for joy just yet, its the shortest one XD I'm evil lol
I find it odd that you've never wandered through a forest yet insist on writeing stories with them lol
On page 4 at the last sentance you change the third person narrator into a personal one, if its his thought you should either put ' ' these on them or change the font :)
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LOL! Your are so fucking funny. Thank you so much for reading my short story. I switched into third person narration?! What the hell?! I did not catch that! Thank you for telling me. I know, I really love forests....hahahaha. No, actually...the boy was all ready dead...he... mehr anzeigen
well, people tend to cry wehn i talk to them lol
i wrote i nightmare i really did have, and it was fuckin creepy lol but my nightmares are normally weird ass fudge lol
you were tellin the story in third person but at one point it changed to personal narrator, sorry i got confused... mehr anzeigen
HAHAHAHA! A fantasy?! NEVA! I have a very good imagination, so I think of everything randomly! :D I guess I just wanted to write a creepy story and I did...welll, its creepy to me. lol. Did you write your nightmare into a book?
Sorry my lack of careful editing confused you.
you really bammed that idea hard, i think it is a fantasy, you just refuse to admit it!!! mwahh haaa, i see through everyone, i found out a friend was amasked murderer and a unicorn and now i find out you are a sectret wannabe murderer lol
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Good story. The end a little confusing, but that is what makes it good. Leaves you wondering.
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How is the ending confusing? :) I am sorry it is confusing. lol
Spooky, atmospheric...my heart breaks for that boy. I hope this will be continued.
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