BookRix

You managed to grasp and show us her emotions well. It does need some editing, but it's a beautiful read and as alsam said, could be developed further.

Descriptive and a tantalizing glimpse into a much longer story/saga. A small part of an obviously much larger picture.

This was a nice piece. And though I don't understand the background, it made me feel as if I had lost someone as well. I could feel the emotions of Aracane as she fell apart and began doubting herself.

And I love Ranger. He's like an old grandfather who knows just what to say and cares deeply for his granddaughter.

In the end, this was a heart warming piece. Very well done :)

Great job!
Keep writing!

---RbG