very good, allie! well done! i could spot only a few mistakes, but if you go through the whole thing again, im sure youll find them.
i like the plotline so far and i REALLY liked the descriptions at the end.
i also liked how Russell reacted to that giant. very funny.
all in all, its well done and the only things i would mess with is the length and a few punctuation and grammar errors. for once, NO SPELLING PROBLEMS!!! nicely done.
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WoW! I loved it! It's really good, the story line is fab and it's really original.
Only problem is... IT'S TOO SHORT!!
PLEASE WRITE MORE!!! :D Thankyou ;)
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