Quagmire

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Quagmire
There is world unlike the one we now know. A destitute world, where the cruelties of man is limited only by the science and greed that can achieve it. Humanity is a dying trait, compassion is a is enough to get a person killed, and the law is more like a guideline to those who live on the fringes of the new world. This is a story of a notorious gang and its mission to cause hell in the devils own playground. This, is Quagmire.

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  • Veröffentlichung: 24.01.2012
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melmmhs94
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melmmhs94

very good, allie! well done! i could spot only a few mistakes, but if you go through the whole thing again, im sure youll find them.
i like the plotline so far and i REALLY liked the descriptions at the end.
i also liked how Russell reacted to that giant. very funny.
all in all, its well done and the only things i would mess with is the length and a few punctuation and grammar errors. for once, NO SPELLING PROBLEMS!!! nicely done.

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High Overlord of Ramenkind
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High Overlord of Ramenkind

WoW! I loved it! It's really good, the story line is fab and it's really original.
Only problem is... IT'S TOO SHORT!!
PLEASE WRITE MORE!!! :D Thankyou ;)
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