Wow. THis was actually very worth the read... I don't know why you don't have more votes. GOod job.
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You are obviously an artist. Great description. I was compelled to keep reading. Sad subject, but very well handeled. you got a vote and a star from me. God Bless
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Hi Donna,
Thanks very much for your kind comments (and the star/vote). It's always nice to get some positive feedback. Thanks again. Best wishes.
Leovineknight
I like your descriptions as you are painting a world unbeknownst to me. However, the story starts out too slowly. I wanted some action to engage me.
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Hi,
Thanks for reading 'Rain Drops on the Window'. It's actually adapted from a chapter halfway through my novel 'Looking Through the Windows of Madness', so this might account for the slow start. The novel begins with a bang, while this chapter is really a retrospective. Still,... mehr anzeigen
Hi Carrie,
Thanks a lot for your feedback. Yes, the piece is adapted from my book 'Looking Through the Windows of Madness'. I've amended the p.15 error - what can I say!
Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again,
Leo
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A neat little slice of life, made all the better for being on the dark side of real. You've packed a lot into these pages, however and I did get the impression this was more of a novel extract than a short story. Enjoyed the descriptions, bar from a couple of places where I felt they were just a little too list-like. Still, the book held my interest and it's obvious you can write. You might want to check out a glaring one... mehr anzeigen
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I really liked this story but the end result was a rather sad commentary on the horrors of growing up with a demented parent. Obviously this young fellow seemed to have found a rather interesting way of coping with the impossible. My heart went out to him for his suffering.
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Hi Marion,
Thanks very much for taking the time to comment. The story is taken from my full novel 'Looking Through the Windows of Madness' - where the theme of coping with the impossible is taken a lot further.
Thanks again.
Leo
I really enjoyed this very descriptive and exciting story. I look forward to reading more of your work!
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Hi Tariq,
Thanks very much for your kind comments. I have a full novel on Bookrix if you'd like to sample it (Looking Through the Windows of Madness).
Thanks again!
Leo Vine-Knight
Thank you for participating in our short story writing contest "Rain Stories".
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Hi,
Thanks very much for your message. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's taken from my novel 'Looking Through the Windows of Madness'.
Cheers,
Leo Vine-knight