BookRix

I HAVE TO SAY THAT THIS BOOK IS NOW BECOMING A SERIES

Hi Layloni! Great story. keep up the good writing. i am sure you will be successful at it, just be careful of some of the words being spelled right. I think you have a good story and a great imagination. I am proud of you!!!/joeparente

HEY ROBIN MAYBE I CAN STILL SEND U MY AUTOGRAPHT IN EMIL LOL

ITS OK

THANK YOU

I'm sorry I spelled your name wrong in my last post 'Layloni' :)

I read all the other comments, and everyone has great advice about your spelling and grammar, so I won't point that out too.
The fact that you're able to navigate through the bookrix site, to me, is amazing. Being able to use your computer is a great beginning.
Your story will be very good and scary when it's all fixed up.
If I were you...I would let my teachers know that you are interested in becoming a writer, and they might be able to help with instructions in this area. I'm sure your parents are very supportive also.
I love the idea that you're writing at this age. I truly believe I'll be asking for your autograph one day if you follow all of the advice given to you by these friends of yours.
Keep it up sweetie!
I'm looking forward to your next story, and I'm sure we'll all be able to see how much better you are getting, the more you write :).
Robin

a good story and a wonderful narrative style which makes the story more interesting and meaningful....

I am so excited that a 10 year old would even sit down and write. Sweetie, I think you did an excellent job of getting your story across, I enjoyed it so much. The more you write, the more you learn. Please, Please continue to write and share your art with the world. Very Best regards and best of luck to you sweet, Rena Kay

good story...Paula