Silent Tears

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Silent Tears
“Don’t worry little one, we will be just fine. You’re father should be home any day now,” I whispered to the life growing inside me. Even as I said it, trying so hard to believe that it was true, I knew in my heart that it wouldn’t be true. That he would never be coming back.

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TyLoves101

THIS BOOK BROUGHT TEARS TO MY EYES I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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TyLoves101

don't criticize the girl's story, she never asked for your opinion . I think it's a very good book..... hmph....kmft

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writingmum

You've got a nice opening there, although it could have been structured differently, something like...

'I rested my hands on my bulging stomach,as I looked across the fields and watched the wind make the stalks of wheat move like a majestic sea of gold. The light from the morning sun felt warm on my face, drying the trails of tears running down my cheeks. I sighed and then I walked back into the house.'

You wrote two nice pages... mehr anzeigen

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Chris-Jean

Thank you, for a lovely story.
I loved the hook, and the way in which you built the suspense and the emotion, throughout the story.
Chris

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