THIS BOOK BROUGHT TEARS TO MY EYES I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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don't criticize the girl's story, she never asked for your opinion . I think it's a very good book..... hmph....kmft
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You've got a nice opening there, although it could have been structured differently, something like...
'I rested my hands on my bulging stomach,as I looked across the fields and watched the wind make the stalks of wheat move like a majestic sea of gold. The light from the morning sun felt warm on my face, drying the trails of tears running down my cheeks. I sighed and then I walked back into the house.'
You wrote two nice pages... mehr anzeigen
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Thank you, for a lovely story.
I loved the hook, and the way in which you built the suspense and the emotion, throughout the story.
Chris
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