thinks about going over what Morgan found. Good points she made.
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Why the dash behind welcome? I thought such dashes were used when the dialogue is interrupted by someone or something. I'd much rather it had a comma instead and 'said' written with a small letter.
...and then come back. Come needs to be in the past tense: came.
This must be me, but I can't picture- an incredible smile. Dazzling, beaming, sweet, seductive, glowing- yes but not incredible. Sorry.
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Thank you for your critique, I'll take a look at them.
In answer to your first question, I have this.
A pair of em dashes can be used in place of commas to enhance readability. Note, however, that dashes are always more emphatic than commas.
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In the example above the em dashes are perfect. But in that bit of dialogue, I find them out of place because the woman wasn't interrupted in her speech. 'You're welcome' is a complete sentence. This link--no. 2 and 9-- might explain better what I mean:
Thank you!
Just about ready for sale.
Still need to edit it.
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I'm going to write a few more stories for this. Plus I'm still editing, but it will go on sale soon.
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