BookRix

i know i know this is not even close to finished i only can use internet a little since mine is almost always down and i can't come to the library every day. plus i try to do it at home and then i get two endings to a chapter mine the internet. any way thanks for telling. i'll try to post more soon but knowing me i'll end up starting another book stuck on another hopefully i'll end up finishing this one soon

in the mean time thanks for the comments each one counts to me and i try to change based on them
:) thanks again:)

I had a little trouble following the plot. Why are super hero's persecuted? Why were the red and white fighting? Why had she been kidnapped 18 times by the red knight? Plus, you're trying to tell us a lot in a short space; you need to practice on "showing vs. telling".

You have the imagination; you just have to work on the mechanics and narration.

ss "The Camera"