READ ON OR DIE TONIGHT AT 10:35 P.M 9 years ago a person named Jerry got dared to sleep in a house that was believed haunted. The next day his friends waited for him outside the house...... They had to go inside and search for him. They went through every room exept the attic. He wasn't supposed to sleep there. He was supposed to sleep in the living room they went to the attic
. They saw Jerry's corpse and they just left... mehr anzeigen
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I liked the journal format. It made me feel as though the events were unraveling before my eyes. Maybe start the first chapter out with Dear Journal and keep it consistent through out the story. I also liked how you wrote in a manner that would indicate the age of the protagonist in the story. What I would have liked to see changed was the run on sentences that I saw throughout the story. Also the story felt a bit short.... mehr anzeigen
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The concept was good. You need to concentrate on your grammar. Bad spelling and grammar tends to make me start editing, instead of reading what you wrote.
Try to keep a dictionary around to look up words. This is just my opinion, and is said in respect. Please don't take offense. Good luck and keep writing.
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THANX(: and i wrote this a while ago so i ddnt really care for spelling (haha) but thank you (: I'd also like to let u know that in know way was this taken in offense
AS alwaysss,
Kayla(:
BRAVO! I AM SO READY FOR BOOK 2!
IS IT SOON OR HAS IT COME OUT YET?
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I'm sooo going to read book 2
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i couldnt tell who was saying what
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i'M VERY sorry you had diffuculty understanding who was saying what.! But I must say it appears everyone else was able to fully understand.
Kayla Miller :-) ;-) :D
I hope as well, that vol.II will come soon.
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Really exciting! When will you upload voluzme II?
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Thanx SO Much! Hopefully I will have it up really soon! I'm ALMOST done writing it! so look for it! Thanks again!
Kayla:)