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They are good, but have mistakes that force me to pause, here were some I noticed:
First Poem
The smell of the cigars reminds me OF those secrets (you missed of)
light the flames of the candles. (you wrote lit, which is the wrong tense)

Second Poem
Will it be like to you also? Beliefs made to exchange it - Yet, what disbeliefs crosses our boundaries The boundaries of Love hasn't been yet found (There are a lot of mistakes in these lines)
Here is how I would fix them:
Will it torture you too?
Beliefs made to exchange it -
Yet, disbelief crosses our boundaries
Our boundaries of Love haven't been found yet

Third Poem
slowly my head loose its sense
Needs to be "slowly my head lost its common sense" or "slowly my head loses its common sense"
I am not entirely sure about what you meant by just sense, but I imagine you were going for something like common sense
You also say in this poem "Loosing ourselves" Loose is something completely different than lose, it should be "losing ourselves"

There are similar mistakes in the other poems, but I'm sure you'll be able to spot them yourself if you look carefully, and objectively enough.

Otherwise, good job :).

Your poems sound like music in my ears. Thank you!L.Mara

love your poems. especially Unfurling Winter flowers- reminds me of today with snow coming down and cover the daffodiles- the last of winter is near here in Iowa.

''Sing to me those songs of Love
and unveil my heart's love for you''

It is like a winter sonata .The book is spectacular.Once you open it you
cannot put it down. Thank you for sharing.

My favorite words are words of love. Some grammar and spelling errors do not take away from the main theme of expressing love through poetry.

I enjoyed your collection of poems! You have a firm grasp and a mastery of the utilization of words and emotions that paint a wonderful painting of the theme of your work. Your poetry has a central theme and I can see the passage of time between the first and the last poem.

Well done and thank you for sharing,

God bless,

Tyrone

There's something about poetry that resonates deeply no matter what the style!

Deserves my vote! Petra :))

Very Well Done!

Very nicely done. I wonder what frame of mind you were in? Good job. God Bless and good luck.

Thank you for participating in our
poetry writing contest "Winter & Poems".

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