BookRix

Hi

Our moments in life come from our mental thought, bodily reactions and spirit. Mind, Body and Spirit are interlinked to one another. All the three works hand in hand in our everyday life.

From
The author of 'Seed of 3 Goals, 1 Vision'
Panchal Antonees

I like what youve written so far but I really think you should try and write a few more short stories for this:)

Thanks for sharing your comments. I will be careful.

I really liked your stories, especially the one about the ice cream. The grubby hand was a great little moment.
In terms of improvement I think you should move away from asking questions near the end because in fiction, especially works so short, you could do more with giving a meaningful sentence that might make the reader think than asking them literally.
All in all, I liked what I read :)