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You caught my attention right from the first paragraph and held it completely through to the end. This was an awesome story. I found myself hoping she would stay, that she had finally found the right family, and you didn't disappoint. There is one place where a sentence needs to be pulled up, just a formatting issue.
The boys were both dark
complexioned ...
Then one place where I would drop a character's action down to a new... mehr anzeigen
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Thank you for participating in our short
story writing contest "Family Stories".
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