I thought the concept for this story was terrific and the way it was presented was done so well, too. What a terrible ability to have considering that shadows are what make 'light' so very beautiful (otherwise, would we even really notice the light?)
Anyway, I wish I could have told you sooner but impartiality required that I waited until after the contest was over. But now that it is--kudos for a terrific tale.
Avery
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you entered the contest too, awesome! I really enjoyed this before so I'll give it a quick vote :) Good luck!
-Angely
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Well done. Good story with imagination.
A cliff-hanger ending? Perhaps not. We all know what happened to our hero.
I voted.
Btw...I really believe Barry gets paid by the word...lol.
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A fine peace of furniture, built from a sturdy bit of hardwood.
instead of the perfectly functional square corners you've used, dovetailed joints will prove more reliable and make the piece a longer lasting heirloom.
While the top is polished to fine finish... some of the interior could use another pass with the sandpaper (and even a hint of linseed oil) applied with the same craftsmanship you've shown in the original... mehr anzeigen
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I liked the tone and voice of your story. Very nicely done. The story was interesting, and has a very unique concept! Burning shadows... very, very original.
However, I do have some critiques:
Great start, though I was a bit confused as your style seemed to switch. First it had a classical, mature feel(which I LOVE!!!) and then it switched to more of a modern feel. Neither one of the styles are bad(on the contrary, they are... mehr anzeigen
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I agree with Angamonkey - the poem was a great addition to the thoughts of his journal entries. This is definitely a recommended reading. Brilliantly done! 8D
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Wow, I'm very glad that you recommended this. I adore how you turned Pauline's name into a poem for the character to reflect upon. I also like the journal format,it really helped tap into the protagonist.
-Angely
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I really like the concept of this book. I think some of the entries could be expanded upon. If they are it will only help understand the character more. But I really like it!
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