BookRix

Well written. Keep it up

good one,The way you described col life is really watching a movie. Really good,you have my vote

Some re-writing is necessary to make this smoother to read. I DO like the story and i am interested in reading more of it. If you polish the sentencing , you will have a winner!./joeparente vote!

John ~ looking forward to the rest of the story!....Paula

I have read the story more then two times & love to read it again & again.

...and then...

Good and interesting story. attention gripping one. ending appears abrupt.

WAS A GOOD STORY. ENJOHYED IT. THANK YOU

Smooth...you have a way with words...Grammar and spelling nice..good to see that.
Will wait for the rest when the time comes.
The vote is yours.
Laz

Interesting beginning. I'm not sure where this is heading but your characters are realistic and likable. I would love to read how their personalities would evolve in the story :) You have my vote.