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Awesome story!

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Chris

Poor fellow. I now know, that if some women I don't know offer me jewelry, I'll express loud and clear, I'm married!!! Yes the fine line between romance and death, Wow!

Good story.

A nice build-up to a delectable twist. With regards to the story itself... I hate it when that happens.

Your writing skills never cease to surprise me. And your ideas are very original, so original that I didn't see the end coming at all. The descriptions of Estrella was also very vivid and added to how the other characters acted. I'm seriously going to have to keep writing non stop for another 5 years for me to get to your level.

Great story. Makes you wonder though, was it worth for the guy in the end? I mean, aside from the pain, he probably went out happy. You have a very creative mind for storytelling. I like it.

Ha-ha, John, you're a riot. I do love the attention to details.

Looking forward to more good eats, er, reads!

Cheers,

Mitch

My third read of yours tonight and, like the others, I found it enchanting in its gruesomeness.

This was a change of pace from the other two but still compelling reading. I thoroughly enjoyed the horror of it all and found the ending quite satisfying...as did our protagonist, no doubt.

she had. I liked the story. Need some longer descriptions, that for my opinion would make it look much better but the base idea is there and for me it works. Good work.