Caught In The Crossfire

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User: fortoggie
Caught In The Crossfire
America now has over 200 million Guns. Over one billion rounds of ammunition.Our personal guns kill more of us than any war. Read and comment.

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Guns, Death, Money, Culture
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Gelöschter User

I really liked this, you are very accurate with evidence to support your reason why guns are so dangerous, there have to be more people like you who write this kind of stuff to help people realize how dangerous guns are. I have heard too many stories on the news, in the paper, and out in public about people being shot with a gun, more people must speak up about this.

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fortoggie

Will try to write more about this in the future.

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lenora.books

As I'm sitting here reading your essay, there has been yet another big shooting in another city in America. We are a violent country because the laws have not been tough enough and the laws we have are not enforced. Too many loopholes and millions have taken advantage of it. Personally, I think the argument that passing new gun laws will do no good is baloney. We have to begin somewhere. We are a violent country and we're... mehr anzeigen

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fortoggie

Thank you.

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Gelöschter User

I'm happy to comment on the piece that you have presented, and this I do. It needs to be reviewed and edited. Not great writing from someone who publishes a weekly magazine. Don't ignore good writing in the haste to get the story on paper.
The argument is good, and the subject matter current and contentious, so it deserves to be aired. I would have enjoyed reading an objective piece that looks at both arguments.

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fortoggie

Will try to edit soon.

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Gelöschter User

Before 'but' you need a comma. You also repeat the word 'dead'. You end one sentence with it and start a new line saying 'dead'. Try to change the sentence structure and find a different word.

"in your community and and in you state." Drop one 'and' and fix the typo to 'your'.

I'm not American, so I won't go into gun control per se. Here we have laws on guns, but we still get the occasional shooting murder. I don't like that... mehr anzeigen

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fortoggie

Definitely need to correct some things but thanks.

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wells12

I fully believe in freedom of speech and you have every right to voice your opinion, as do I. I was raised in a small town in Oklahoma. My dad was a hunter, not only for the sport but to put meat in our freezer. I was raised around guns and taught how to handle them or not handle them. My dad was very careful to keep his guns in a locked gun safe. He no longer hunts but shoots on a competition team (he is 79). For years he... mehr anzeigen

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fortoggie

Yes I too was reared in a gun owning family and we were careful. Some events around here just got me cocking my verbal gun.

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JustinSix

I have gotten into way too many verbal fights on the topic of guns... There is work needed on the piece, but overall it's good.

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fortoggie

Thank you

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