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thanks a lot bookzilla :P I'll start editing it a bit more and adding more stuff, but like I said I wanted feedback to see what changes and fixes I needed to make lol. Btw, most of my mistakes might've been because my native language is spanish so I tend to confuse a lot of words lol but thanks a bunch!!
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i can tell that the idea for this story is a really good one. i have never read anything about a heartless man before... but are they good or bad?
i found your story to be very interesting, but also confusing. it seems like it was written in a rush and things are pushed together where there should be spaces and more explanations.
here is an example from the first page:
when you say that he is wearing all black "like most... mehr anzeigen
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