I didn't get it until I took a look at the title again. An ingenious idea for the story and played out perfectly all the way to the end.
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What a funny, detailed episode! Most of us can relate to those strange co-workers and when you're young, well, stuff happens. You hang with people you shouldn't oughta! This was a page turner and loved all the characters.
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hey monarinaldi,
this is another great story from you! you set up the characters really well and moved the story along really smoothly. i kept reading straight through without even a thought about stopping.
i especially liked the details about their assistant manager.
just so you know, there are a couple mistakes:
"as i rinsed my out my bowl" on page 9 you need to take out the first "my".
after dialogue that ends in ! or ? you... mehr anzeigen
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