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Please update this book I want to know what happens please...

I would love to know what happens

I've heard it said by many agents and editors that first novels should not have "introductions", but in this case I liked yours. It's a nice set up, establishing a bit of back story and I particularly liked the humorous irony of the name Delilah more appropriately belonging to...a cheerleader (one word:)
Keep in mind, "show", don't "tell", and check out those two sentences beginning, "Him and me...". Think, "He and I...".
Remember, too, to keep a reader you'll have to establish a driving need for Delilah; something that pushes and pulls her through the course of the story or novel. It's called her Quest, and it must be there:) Set up roadblock after roadblock, each which she must get over/around by her wits, luck...whatever. A little help; Google "The Hero's Journey".
GOOD job. Good start.

Lol:)
You're funny:)

Lol:)
You're funny:)

Oh yes! Totally!! Lmao:p

Aww:)

Is this book about me?
Haha, just kidding:)

Thanks for the idea..I haven't worked on this piece in a while..so I might change it up..

Ummm, Idk what font I used..But I am trying to write more.

Hey i enjoyed the book! =) i really hope that you write more.
Btw, what kinda font did you use?